Father and son
This picture shows us the two lovely guys, a father and a son who look smart and trendy with black shirts. The picture was taken last weekend at Golden Park. The man who has a long beard and short black hair on the left is Jackson. He is Sam's father, the boy who is on the right. Jackson is an attractive person with beautiful tattoos and a smartly black beard. He is a tall man who has an average build and fair complexion. His shirt, belt, jeans, and boots are black. And because of his fashionable style, it makes him looks very smart and handsome. In addition, He is a kind of person who loves photography and travelling with his son. He often spend time on weekend with his son, Sam. And one of favorite activities that he loves to do is to go fishing. Most of his favorite activities, he will do with his son. That's why people call him a lovely black beard man.
However, we cannot forget a pretty boy beside Jackson who has short blond hair and fair skin. He has sparkling eyes and oval face. He is a 7-year-old-boy with a beautiful smile. He is really cute when he is with his father and wear the same shirt. It makes him looks smart and trendy like his father. He is a friendly and talkative boy. And definitely, his favorite hobbies are photography and spending time with his father. He loves to go fishing and talking with his father. And he is also a creative boy, he loves crafting and making DIY. Both of two persons are really cute and I look forward to seeing them in another picture.
However, we cannot forget a pretty boy beside Jackson who has short blond hair and fair skin. He has sparkling eyes and oval face. He is a 7-year-old-boy with a beautiful smile. He is really cute when he is with his father and wear the same shirt. It makes him looks smart and trendy like his father. He is a friendly and talkative boy. And definitely, his favorite hobbies are photography and spending time with his father. He loves to go fishing and talking with his father. And he is also a creative boy, he loves crafting and making DIY. Both of two persons are really cute and I look forward to seeing them in another picture.
Your score is 9.5
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ตอบลบOoh, he's so handsome. You describe the content well. I give you 9.5
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